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The Whole Poem "the Beginning"

Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86 /81 /90
Words: 561
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I put all Three parts of the poem "The Beginning" together... and this is what I have.

The Whole Poem "the Beginning"

His 18th birthday, It was a blast
mom gave him a present they thought would last
when he unwrapped it, his jaw, it dropped
she couldn't help, but laugh a lot

All of a sudden she was on a shoulder
& being run up the stairs with, him the holder
they were gone for hours after that
no one seen them, they just heard their "act"

When they finally came down both their bodies glistened
All they could do was laugh as the two listened
The first night she went there was a bad one
she found out something very wrong

She had her first grand mal
She didn't quite remember if it was the beginning of spring or end of Fall
All she knew is that there was still snow on the ground
It took them all of ten minutes before she was found

Then after that to the hospital she went
She didn't know how she had gotten there,
just remembered she was wet,
from the snow she had fallen into

Then in the doors, she had to go through
On a bed they put her & locked her down
So that she wouldn't hurt herself or break her crown
Then on with the tests, they proceeded

She seemed to get colder as they got heated
looking for more ways to poke her skin to find something wrong
All the while in her head ran this song
she couldn't seem to get away from

She knew that it seemed dumb
Anyway, now, they weren't together
they believed they would last forever
they thought they were pregnant who knows how many times

They were ready to spend every single little dime
then something happened and they started fighting
I’m back again, with the same old tale
About this guy and the same little girl

They made it last for 7 months
But in public they put up fronts
To hide their anger from each other
The only one that helped them was his mother

When they lived together in their cozy home
At first it seemed like nothing would go wrong
We went through our lives day after day
Hoping that nothing would go astray

The story begins and ends the same,
with a girl in love and a boy insane
She hurt that boy and she had regret it,
But the way she felt will never get this

Way into my heart again
Still the same little tale of this boy and girl
yet this time they were together
and the world did unfurl

they thought yet again
They could make "This" work
Then the same old story
The girl drove the boy to the end

She pushed him away,
and yet again the same old story
from beginning to end
She broke his heart, became self righteous

He lost all thoughts, his mind did fight this
He wanted her more than ever
yet he knew she would hold the endeavor
They fought and screamed

they tore each others hearts out
they are done for now
and she think forever
She left him again

she could no longer see
that he cared about her as said he
So now I am done with "The beginning”

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