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    dots Submission Name: IT'S AN ADDICTIONdots
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    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 800
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    dotsIT'S AN ADDICTIONdots
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    It's a cycle so vicious no-one ever wins
    It starts with self hate
    And ends up so much worse.
    Its an addiction, so hard to break
    I started it to escape
    From the world and all the realities.
    After not too long I started looking for a way out
    From the tool I used to escape.
    Its an addiction, so hard to break
    It may not be the most ideal way of coping with life
    But at the time it was all I could get.
    I grasped it with both hands
    But when I wanted to let go
    It had over me a strong hold
    With almost no way out.
    Its an addiction, so hard to break.




    Submitted on 2008-04-25 17:06:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a nice write, I liked it over all.
    I just have a little trouble with line 14.
    This poem reminds me of a poem I wrote
    called (Poet's Affliction) I don't know maybe
    we're writing about the same subject.
    Let me know what you think.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      this rymed, but yet it didn't. the repition of "it's an addiction, so hard to break" really tied it toghether.
    | Posted on 2008-04-26 00:00:00 | by Kat Tudor | [ Reply to This ]


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