I am Icarus Falling by lebeauvide

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Author:	lebeauvide
Elite Ratio:	2.91 - 75/179/84
Words:	121

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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I am Icarus Falling dots

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I am Icarus- falling
Into oblivion below
Crashing into certain doom
And things I do not know

I flew on wings of wax
Then I began to melt
My whole life dripped away
Along with the love I'd felt

I am Prometheus- chained
Forced into suffering
Made to pay the price
As if it was all for nothing

Torn to pieces each day
But healing just enough
I am Prometheus chained
Bound by the ties of love

I am Echo- silent
Unable to escape
Not a word that I can say
To make this go away

I repeat what others say
Unable to speak on my own
I am Echo- silent
Made to live alone

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WOW I can't believe no one has commented... Maybe they don't know Greek mythology but I happen to love it and I thought this was a wonderful spin on that... It flowed very nice which I think complemented the feeling of being restrained without being able to even scream while you're falling from where you really want to be... Just what I got I think you could have made it more complex and using these wonderful stories as a foundation but for what you were expressing I thought it was great... I wouldn't change anything wonderful write in my opinion and I will make sure to read more from you... Hope you get to read some of mine...

Great Write,
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