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    dots Submission Name: Angeldots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 162/150/58
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 83
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1716



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    dotsAngeldots
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    This is my objection to the ways I used to be
    If I’m afraid to show affection, please be patient with me
    Did I mention, there’s still so much left I want you to see
    You made me believe, you make me feel free
    I know inside I’m worth more than i could ever tell
    ‘Cause when I look into your eyes, I see an image of myself
    I don’t know why, but this feeling is more than I have felt
    ‘Cause you’re worth so much more
    Than I have ever had before

    I find myself daydreaming about what it is I want
    But what is the meaning when it’s what I’ve already got
    I’ve wanted you, and I feel as lucky as can be
    God sent me an angel, and now you’re here with me

    This is the first instant in which I’ve felt lucky to be alive
    ‘Cause it seems with mine, I missed it, but I see it in your eyes
    Knowing at any minute that this could all pass me by
    Makes me scared to try, but it’s worth the fight
    ‘Cause i love your green eyes, and the way you make me laugh
    I love the life that lives inside, and all of the confidence you have
    There’s nothing I can say tonight, that will take me off this path
    ‘Cause I’ll do anything I have to
    To travel this road to see you

    I don’t remember a time when I’ve felt like this
    I never knew I could be so selfless
    There’s so many things that I want to do
    I see life differently cause of you
    Every small thing can be a great thing, and I want you to see
    This is the viewpoint that you’ve given me
    ‘Cause life’s what you make it, and it’s true
    I want to make it worth so much to you




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    ||| Comments |||
      There were some lines in these lyrics that I really liked a lot, especially "Cause life’s what you make it, and it’s true
    I want to make it worth so much to you"

    This line seemed a little confusing: "‘Cause it seems with mine, I missed it, but I see it in your eyes" Use of "mine" left me wondering what to infer.

    I don't know why I'm the first to comment on this particular piece but feel it is deserving of more feedback than you have gotten. If you let it sit and go back to revise, I'd be interested in reading it again.

    :-) Sharon


    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]



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