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    dots Submission Name: Those three words never saiddots

    Author: Xena
    ASL Info:    17/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 24/20/22
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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       I wrote this almost right after I called my guy friend i have a super crush on and he said he was busy and hung up.

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    dotsThose three words never saiddots

    I'm sitting outside the pool in front of your old truck waiting for you. I'm saying I love you over and over again in my thoughts. I see you coming towards me and I prepare to just blurt it out. But thee instant you say hi, I loose every thought and all my breath. My heart begins to pound three times faster. All I can manage is a pitiful hello. You talk for a few minutes, asking what is wrong, and of course I say nothing, tired of being stupid I walk away. I look back at you just dying to say those three words, but once again I don't.

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