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    dots Submission Name: Daddy's forgotten little girldots

    Author: Xena
    ASL Info:    17/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 24/20/22
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 415
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       Wrote this at 3:30 am. Inspiried from Confessions of a broken heart

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    dotsDaddy's forgotten little girldots

    Daddy, where did you go?
    Why did you leave me here alone?
    I needed you so why did you leave me?
    Wasn't I good enough for your love?
    Am I Daddy's forgotten little girl?
    I always keep a piece of you no matter were I go,
    I always remember you, even though you don't remember me,
    I don't know you but I really want to
    I dream of another you, one who would never leave me alone.
    Am I still daddy's forgotten little girl?
    Tell me the truth, did you ever love me?
    I'm looking in the mirror and I see staring right back at me,
    I'm on my knee's begging you to hear me,
    But I know you won't hear me
    It's because you've forgotten me
    Becase you never really wanted me
    I messed up your perfect life
    I'm just daddy's forgotten little girl

    Submitted on 2008-04-26 11:10:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whoa im went to sad mode after reading that i can tell it is aout or it looks like. there was one part that i was lost at "i'm looking into the mirrorand i seestaringright back at me"im lost there so just add a little there other then that it was good kepp writeing your fellow writer jesse aka vencix
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by vencix | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa, how very sad,
    I loved this one, it has a very sad true feel to it that hits me really close to home.
    "I dream of another you, one who would never leave me alone" I have done that with my dad,he did that same stuff to me,man it really hurts. This is very deep,I would comment on some of your others but I took a vow never to comment on love poems.
    "I always remember you, even though you dont remember me"
    Thats my favorite line, its so true, dads can leave and not even seem to think about what they left behined, once again this was wonderful.

    Diablo Tapitio AKA
    | Posted on 2008-04-26 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]

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