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    dots Submission Name: Desiredots
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    Author: fightingirl19
    ASL Info:    17/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    4.98 - 148/123/48
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 109
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 501



    Description:
       I seem to be very into these morbid perverted writings now a days. Aw well,


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    dotsDesiredots
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    Scrape out my insides with your lies,
    I'll clench my teeth and look to the skies.

    Break my body like you broke my heart,
    I'll run again without falling apart.

    Make me miserable with shame,
    I'll force myself to be the same.

    Tape my eyes shut with your twisted hate,
    I'll be content and await my fate.

    Shake out all my strength to the floor,
    I'll still stand up and prepare for more.




    Submitted on 2008-04-26 11:50:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah a little morbid ha ha it's a nice write but to tell you the truth I was expecting a little more when I read the title. I just thought there are so many possibilities you can express with that idea and found it just a little simple but maybe thats what you were going for. That you are constrained by this and no matter what happens you will never lose that desire. Overall I thought it was a good write but for me It left me wanting more but I guess you could never fulfill your desires ha ha...

    Nice write,
    Anthony
    | Posted on 2008-04-27 00:00:00 | by Kersofmia | [ Reply to This ]


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