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    dots Submission Name: THE MANGLED 1dots
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    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTHE MANGLED 1dots
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    falling falling falling
    i crash onto the floor
    i slowly get up
    it's dark and cold
    i pick up my flash light
    i turn it on
    and what i see
    horrifies me
    bloody dead bodies
    all over the walls and ceiling
    all stitched together
    like a giant quilt
    my legs start to shake
    i walk through what looks like a tunnel
    i make my way through the spider webs
    my arm is bleeding from the crash
    but i pay no attention to it
    theres a table up ahead of me
    i walk over to it
    there are torture weapons
    all over the table
    sudenly i here foot steps
    my mind tells me to run
    but my feet just won't move........

    to be continued!






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