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    dots Submission Name: THE MANGLED 2dots
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    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTHE MANGLED 2dots
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    the foot steps are getting closer
    i put my flashlight in the dirrection of the foot steps
    i can still hear them
    getting closer and closer
    i qhickly turn around and i run
    i run as fast as i can
    then "SMACK"
    face first into a wall
    i fall to the ground
    at this point i am barley concious
    i regain my conciousness
    and i still hear the foot steps getting closer
    and becoming faster...

    to be continued








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