Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Gift (I'm Gone)dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 358
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 618
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2092



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Gift (I'm Gone)dots
    -------------------------------------------


    This is the gift, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done was wrong
    This is all shit, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done is wrong

    I wrote you a verse, and thatís all that youíre worth
    Just a stick to be pissed on and stuck in the dirt
    And on it, I planted a flag, this statue I made
    A silhouette of the devil, it looks like your face

    I made this as an effigy for you
    Iíll burn it to the ground cause I fucking hate you

    This is the gift, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done was wrong
    This is all shit, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done is wrong
    Youíre just a bitch
    You make me sick
    Get the fuck out of my life
    I hope you die

    I wrote you these chords, though it is so much more
    Than you worth, you deserve this cause you are a whore
    It couldnít be love, cause you have been repeatedly touched
    By a hundred other people, you have been used up

    I made it a point to include this little part
    ĎCause you know itís true and it tears you apart

    This is the gift, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done was wrong
    This is all shit, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done is wrong
    Youíre just a bitch
    You make me sick
    Get the fuck out of my life
    I hope you die

    This is just step one
    Now, look what youíve done
    This is just step one
    Look how far Iíve come

    Iíve moved on and Iím as happy as can be
    ĎCause I found someone I love that makes me happy
    How does it feel to know youíll never be mine
    Iíve moved on with my life, I hope that you die

    This is the gift, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done was wrong
    This is all shit, Iím gone
    Everything weíve ever done is wrong
    Youíre just a bitch
    You make me sick
    Get the fuck out of my life
    I hope you die

    This is just step one
    Now Iím done




    Submitted on 2008-04-26 22:23:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      If this were made into a song, I'd probably have it on my iPod, to be perfectly honest. It's almsot like a "fight song" as my friends and I call it. There's so much energy and emotion going through this that it's almsot fun to read. Someone must have really pissed you off to inspire you to write this. There are so many lines that you've used in this that, to me, are just genious and reading some of your stuff tonight has really made my day.

    =MHK=
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    160755

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Carry written by saartha
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Shi written by ShyOne
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Cover written by saartha
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    prison written by ShyOne
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry