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    dots Submission Name: If you read this you have too much timedots

    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 768
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsIf you read this you have too much timedots

    little letters inconvenent and in cogneto
    create strain and aggervation
    a whole world blind
    whats to come of our great nation?

    premetitated events prove to strenthen fear
    while concentration and intearment camps
    show no bounds
    And work to make us pure.

    A country sponed from Hitler
    Hypicrites! but arn't we all?
    united states of Amearica, a melting pot
    but when in rome do as the romans do and fall.

    Our flag a symbol of our pride
    now displayed behind shattered glass
    our people so proud of our advances
    yet, tragedy shocks us, our past remains and our time here ends to fast.

    next generation takes our place
    elders continue to die
    as we sit in the shadows
    of patrism and cry.

    Submitted on 2008-04-26 22:35:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with Piper...the spelling errors are a hindrance to the impact of the read..clean those up and this is really a strong poem...with a very resounding message...
    especially now days...as America, once so revered seems to have fallen on hard times...and we seem to feel we need to shove Lady Liberty down everyone's throat.

    they all have to be like us....sort of Hitler thing when we really think about it...

    guess i had too much time on my hands huh?

    but hey, really liked what this expressed.

    | Posted on 2011-06-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I indeed have too much time. Even though there are some spelling errors, I loved your poem.
    It seemed to me like a very powerful political statement, and it was well composed.

    Keep on writing. :)

    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem cries to the gods for "SPELL CHECK"!! run it though and I'll read it....
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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