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    dots Submission Name: Life Sucksdots
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    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 666
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    Description:
       Uhh well I was listening to Requiem for a Dream. And wrote this....


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    dotsLife Sucksdots
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    Suicide notes and
    Butterfly kisses
    Memories of
    The ones she misses

    Her past haunts her
    And her future is bleak
    Determined to make it
    She begins to seek

    She wants to be better
    Live above her mom
    Stray away from drugs
    And that worthless junkie scum

    Sweet sixteen
    Crying out her eyes
    I couldn’t begin to name
    All the drugs she tries

    Raped at seventeen
    With a baby and all
    The boy who did it
    Lives just down the hall

    Eighteen comes
    And so does depression
    You may have guessed
    The such repercussion

    Slit her wrists
    Flushed the baby away
    Mourners cry
    Buried the next day




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