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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 962
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    knock..knock
    are you there?

    one question
    do you really think I know
    what's happening?
    because I don't
    it's all a mystery
    to me as to you
    my sight is clear
    but in pieces
    I'm guided by the Wind
    and protected by his army
    but you hold the key
    to unlock the time
    one the gift of wisdom
    and the other of knowledge
    without each other..nothing

    shall we put away our needs
    to think about humanity
    there is a battle to be won
    against things that are unseen

    next week we will be
    standing on the same soil
    I'll leave it to you
    if you want to meet

    Just to let you know
    I prayed for a rainbow today
    and God sent me one












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    ||| Comments |||
      I have a suggestion for a title; it's already in your poem

    "Guided By The Wind".

    Your excellent poem has just enough ambiguity to let the reader's mind go their own way...

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I will favor this poem, I love it and understand it well. Nice.

    Thank you for your comment too Christie
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi thanx so much for the kind words on promice land i am glad you liked it

    i liked this piece you wrote its very subtle but also saz alot

    thanx again

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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