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Standing in Line on Judgement Day


Author: MusingMinstrel
ASL Info:    26/Male/Chicago
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Standing in Line on Judgement Day



I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I see St Peter and he’s standing at the gate
And there’s a disappointed look on his face

Oh forgive me Father for I have sinned
I said I wouldn’t do it but I did it again
Sure didn’t mean to do anyone any harm
I wasn’t faithless just restless,
I got bored and I got depressed
Gotta do what ya can to get along
I liked singing the blues and paying my dues
Giving highbrow attitude
To those who said they knew me but didn’t know me at all
I liked cigarettes and drinking with friends
And remembering those that time forgets
Cuz surely I’d become one of them before long

I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
If St Peter says can he find my name
If not there must be some kinda mistake

I never thought I’d get to see twenty fo’
Let alone enough get past the age to vote
I’ll always wonder if Social Security was a hoax
If nobody knows when its their time to go
Burning the candle way too fast starts burning it low
Nobody will know when to make that last call home
Lonely nights, you sitting there by the phone
While I worked my fingers down to the bone
To give those a life that I never have known
But with every minute that was passing by
Either at work or in a rush hour traffic drive
All I wanted to be was there laughing by your side

I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
Is my dad up here and did he put a good word in for me
Or is he locked in the basement with hot coals under his feet?

I see killers and rapists and scum of the earth
Who have lived a hundred years since their birth
Standing in the line, Standing in the line
What would I give to have their duration of life
And work to make all the wrong in this world right
But only the good are taken before there perceived time

I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I’m standing here on judgment day
Just a wondering what to say
I see St Peter and he’s standing at the gate
And there’s a disappointed look on his face




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  judgement day is an interesting thought.
i have no idea what look ill get from st peter when im in line up there...

it isnt coz ive been a bad person [though there are moments of my life of which i am not proud] and it isnt because i think ive done everything a girl should do to earn her salvation...

im sure my attitude toward myself must grieve god...i mean... he created me and i cant stand me most of the time and that seems a little crazy... you know?

"god i love you i just dont love the me you made"

what a slap in the face...


its interesting that you do no discriminate while standing in the line... waiting there with all kindsa people - both good and bad and the way you sorta ask why your life was cut so short when all you ever wanted to do was be the best man for your family...

traffic is a killer of time thats for sure.

is this on your myspace? id love to hear it...






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