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    dots Submission Name: MY FERRETS LAST DAYdots

    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 595
    Average Vote:    3.6667
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    dark red eyes watching me
    straight in my eyes
    i stare back into them
    waiting for something to happen
    he scampers across the room
    i follow
    he makes his way to his napping area
    and he hides
    sneaking underneath the blanket
    he pokes his head out
    again dark red eyes staring straight into mine
    i stare back into them
    once again he scampers across the room
    running back and forth
    as i chase him
    i fall to the floor out of breath
    he jumps on my chest and gives me his deadly kisses
    i laugh
    he smiles
    i smile back
    then he cuddles up to my neck
    and we both enjoy the moment

    Submitted on 2008-04-27 10:50:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    not sure i understand the title, but this is fairly spiffy. but then again, i am pretty partial to ferrets. Decent. Work on your style a bit, add a little polish.

    Maddie Lane
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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