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    dots Submission Name: A sold out soul, a youth fucked updots

    Author: Piper
    ASL Info:    23/ Female/ The System
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 52/54/37
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1492
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 938


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    dotsA sold out soul, a youth fucked updots

    Is life supposed to be like this
    Whoring and selling out to be someone
    Heroin, cocaine, LSD and speed
    Mental illnesses and bisexual love

    I'm so glam in my faux-fur coat
    Kissing girls and drinking champagne
    I let them tape while I fuck a stranger
    I'll do anything to draw attention

    As a child I've been molested
    I've been mocked, and I've been beaten
    Scars on my arms faded away
    But now I'm a whore, a culture slut

    I am everything, still I have nothing
    I love you, I hate you
    Manic depressive
    Call me your lover, I don't give a fuck

    Everybody loves me,
    No one respects me
    Take my body,
    Throw my mind away

    I cannot make a living
    With just my intelligence
    Too shallow, to greedy
    Just a faceless nihilism.

    Submitted on 2008-04-27 15:41:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it except that I think it would give so much more to the topic if it flowed more like a rant. I'm not sure how to explain what I mean but when I read it, I head a person saying it very sharply and I think if the sentences were a bit choppier, the point would come across a lot harder.

    I really like the 2nd stanza.
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      damn... is that all true... cuz that totally sucks.
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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