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    dots Submission Name: one, two, love pulls threwdots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       there is alot i was thinking but the only thing that is important is i dont mean one night i mean one hardship. this poem is meant to be read fairly fast(except the last line), bleh, wish i could exsplain it better. umm, dont pause read it fast lol

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    dotsone, two, love pulls threwdots

    never happy, never sad,
    makes a man slightly mad.

    allways awake, allways dreaming.
    dreaming of that new begining.

    lost alot, put nothing back,
    now theres a whole, cut the slack.

    what to do, what to say,
    i just want a sunny day.

    i love the rain, i love the mist,
    but now im feeling kinda pissed.

    the skys are black, and full of rain,
    allways wet, im feeling the pain.

    runaway and hold it tight,
    for love will last threw this nasty night.

    Submitted on 2008-04-27 15:44:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. It flowed perfectly till the last line. You have to many syallables in that line to read it as fast as you wanted. Other than that, it was awesome. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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