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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 403



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    I wanna kill you
    I wanna kill you
    I wanna kill you
    And your dreams!

    You're nothing
    you're nothing
    you will always
    be nothing to me!

    I hate you
    I hate you
    A bleeding hear
    worn on my sleeve!

    I hate you!
    I'll kill you!!
    cause you will ALWAYS
    be nothing to me!!!




    Submitted on 2008-04-27 20:11:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well...this one's hard to comment on as far as advice goes;
    no way [or need] to improve or edit rage this pure. heh, what I don't get is where this one came from, I remember this day- you weren't even pissed :P

    still, I'll applaud you for this,
    I couldn't write something like this,
    I'd pick it apart too much and decide it needed to be more artistic-
    yet there's something undeniably artistic about it exactly as it is

    love you :)
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      strong emotional piece. something you have to get out of your system. keep writing.
    | Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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