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Everybody Loves

Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
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Words: 169
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I don't really feel this way.
all the time... ha ha.

Everybody Loves

“Do you know what love is?”
I asked my dog, and she didn’t seem
to have an answer.
She just buried her face in a blanket
and moaned.

So I asked my other dog,
“Do you know what love is?”
And she jumped up and down,
running circles around the room,
smiling and wagging her tail back and forth.
She is happy
and therefore oblivious to love

“Do you know what love is?”
I asked our other dog.
He’s really old and waddles from his bed
to his food from his bed to his food.
He growled at me
for being so fanciful.
“When you get this old
you just don’t think about such things,” he said.

And they moaned and danced and lied
and smiled and jumped and cried but in the end

it didn’t matter.

Everybody is alive
and then everybody dies.

Submitted on 2008-04-28 00:12:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wonderful beginning. Although you have a great meaning with your ending, i don't think that between this stanza and that stanza, it interlinks:

"you just don’t think about such things,” he said.

And they moaned and danced and lied "

To me, i loved the different versions of love. Different people love differently. And even though people have different perception as to what love is, still we all have to go the same way.

I also saw it as a cycle of life. Young, filled with energy, middle aged; understanding and old age, "I love you but that doesn't matter" type of idea. It's an interesting theme put in an interesting way. I enjoyed the three stanzas best. Perfect example.

Have a great day.

| Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the fact that you're talking to your dogs. I do that with my dog sometimes....great meaning too. I really love this write....I think I found a new favorite lolx.

| Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by Heidiluv | [ Reply to This ]

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