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    dots Submission Name: IT'S NOT FAIR MOMdots
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    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 561



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    dotsIT'S NOT FAIR MOMdots
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    why do you do this to us
    cant you see that we suffer
    i cant possibly bare it anymore
    the pain is far too grand
    the life you make
    the choices you make
    all come back and haunt us
    its not fair
    its not fair
    the alcohol the drugs
    the drinking and the sniffing
    and the popping of pills
    oh why have you done this
    such torturous deeds
    why do you do this
    do you not care
    do you not want to share
    a life with us
    its not fair
    its not fair




    Submitted on 2008-04-28 17:42:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, you can really express your anger and sadness well. I am sorry you know those emotions so good at your age. I do feel your pain, only I am the mom..... I am clean and sober now but the road isn't easy. Keep your chin up and I hope to read some happy words from you...

    Carm
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by goodcarmacurley | [ Reply to This ]


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