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    dots Submission Name: What to wish for....dots

    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       Inspired by a wish. (It has been about a year since I've written something, so take it easy will ya?)

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    dotsWhat to wish for....dots

    It has been said before; that you can't see life behind still photos...
    But what is it that pulls at me when I get caught staring into those eyes?
    What is it about that smile, that breathes life into all who gaze upon it?
    What is it about that photo, that breaks all the rules and makes one regret goodbyes?

    What is the purpose of making a wish, if it could ever really come true?
    What is the purpose of longing, while I'm sitting here staring at a photo of you?
    What does a man wish for, if he could have one chance to make the impossible happen?
    What's the purpose of making a wish, when it's a lamp that you are lackin'?

    What can a man believe in, when his greatest fantasy outweighs his best reality?
    What can a man hold dear, if he cannot have just one wish come true?
    What is the purpose of staring, just to grow weak from a heart beating out of turn?
    What is the purpose of making a wish, that's what I'm trying to construe.

    Why do I find myself, longing to rub a lamp?
    Why do I find myself, stinging from the past?
    Why do I hold a fantasy; so dear, so close to heart?
    If I could have my wish to make reality from this fantasy, where exactly would I start?
    Why does this fantasy, never fade as the day grows dark?
    I know that I cannot have my wish, but I hope I've left my mark.

    Submitted on 2008-04-28 21:50:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow...
    this is a stunning piece, really.
    heartfelt and such longing...beautifully done.
    and i agree with the first comment...it did 'mesh' together just nicely.
    good stuff hun...good to see ya writing again!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Jesus, i honestly like this, i mean i really like this a lot. [censored], i love how you can incorperate sp innocence with longing. if im making any sense. but god i love who this is all meshed together.

    i thought at first that the word "wish" was kinda repetative but after awhile it all fell into place so really this is brilliant.

    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]

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