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    dots Submission Name: Clementinedots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsClementinedots
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    I fear I've failed you,
    lovely one;
    Lucy in the sky who sings
    the wrappings of my sighs.

    Where are you now,
    my lost Clementine,
    in my dreams of city lights?




    Submitted on 2008-04-28 22:50:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "sings the wrappings of my sighs"

    wish i had thought of that line...too good.
    | Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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