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    dots Submission Name: New Beginningdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 412
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    Description:
       I'm trying to get my poems published, this is the start to book 2.


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    dotsNew Beginningdots
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    I feel empty
    Inside I'm hollow
    Keep on living
    What brings tomorrow

    I've been burnt
    I've felt pain
    I've been hurt
    Have no shame

    My reasons were there
    I felt no remorse
    Never searched to care
    Then my heart divorce

    Tomorrow was my bliss
    Now it mocks with wry
    Something afraid to miss
    Now it's my alibi

    Why do I keep going
    Why do I walk through coals
    Why won't the burning end
    Why does it hurt my soul

    If I keep trying
    Tomorrow might bring
    Something to me
    Instead of nothing

    It can't be as good
    But it's better than now
    Once you reach rock bottom
    There is no going down

    Though covered in coals
    The ground feels cold




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