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    dots Submission Name: Just Whendots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1035/1330/360
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 85
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1162



    Description:
       ABAAB format; eight syllables per line.

    A word of encouragement for the weary.


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    dotsJust Whendots
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    Just when I'd thought of giving in,
    of raising high that old white flag,
    the prospect I could never win,
    now too far gone to start again,
    with losses piled high in the bag;

    there came a call so clearly mine,
    that I could not ignore its tone.
    As shivers traveled down my spine,
    this message sent in love divine,
    was meant for only me, alone.

    While dangling from the barest thread
    still hanging on with knuckles white,
    my strength, in ounces, sapped and shed,
    all hope seemed bleak, the outlook dead,
    until God spoke to my delight.

    "Fear not, my child, for I AM near.
    I AM not far. Do not despair.
    If storms clouds shroud the way that's clear,
    I'll come for you. So do not fear.
    I shall not leave you stranded there."

    Just when I thought I'd lost the fight,
    when I was certain it was through;
    as darkness must give way to light,
    God heard my cry and saw my plight,
    and gave me hope, when he sent you.


    The Gadfly




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