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    dots Submission Name: Wolfdots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 748
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    Description:
       It is a confused poem, it may not flow at all and has no rhyme scheme.


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    dotsWolfdots
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    Where did the sweet wolf go?
    The one not afraid to walk amongst the crowd.
    The wolf with bright eyes,
    as he called his song out to the moon.

    Now the wolves grown cold,
    and he only wants to walk alone.
    Pulling me into the lonliness,
    Disregarding needs.
    Only his selfish deeds.

    Trickery and lies,
    candy coated words.
    Ending each sentence in sighs,
    He blames me for all wrong done.

    I cry out in frustration,
    cannot live in all this pain.
    The love of the wolf I once had,
    is slowly melting and boiling to anger.
    To hatred.




    Submitted on 2008-04-29 07:05:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is an extremely powerful piece. Different from the others I have read from you. Some of them draw on sadness, loneliness, despair, love etc, but this takes the hurt and channels it into something pure. Raw anger, with the clarity that one will be frustrated no longer, and refuses to be tormented further. Definitely an instant favorite.
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]


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