Description: THis poem is about loving life, wanting to live and how life leaves you...live will leave everyone because eventually we all die...basically the person in my poem is saying they loved to live so why did it all have to end?
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In Love With Life -------------------------------------------
I’m tired of this world being so cruel
I’m tired of watching life and death duel
I’m tired of your voice inside my head
I’m tired of missing what’s long been dead
I’m tired of wondering what is true
Most of all I’m tired of missing you…
When you walked away it cut me to the bone
Even when you were there I was all alone
Now I can barely recall you touch
When we were together I felt so much
One of the things you taught to me
Was what it was to really see
And that…
To get go heaven you must go through hell
To judge a man you should visit his cell
To appreciate life you have to die
To get the answers you need to ask why
Well here I am now asking why
Screaming it up at the black sky
I was so happy…did you feel the same
Or was it you were just playing some game
Was I a temporary obsession
I’m ready now to hear your confession
Why didn’t our happiness last
I didn’t dream it would end so fast
Underneath it all love is only pain
Meant to be understood by the insane
Why did you have to go away
Can nothing I do make you stay
I loved you…
I love you…
For whatever made you leave I’ll take the blame
Anything to see your face and hear your name…
Life
this was beautiful as well, you are a very good poet, alex. i like this. i have never really read anything that said someone was in love with life. it is different and original. agreeing with most everyone else, i liked your little theries, you can't appreciate life utill you die. those are good. great work alex.
Loved thos. Definiteky a life poem. You had a unique ryhme scheme. I thought the ideas and your personal thoghts you had in thipoe wee awesome. You created good imagrey as well. Very creativie. Good work
I liked this. It made me think about... umm life! You had a good rhyme scheme even though you did each stanza a bit differently. I thought you had some cool ideas in here about what you have to do to get to heaven. Overall I thought it was a very original and good write! Brooke
very cool poem. i like it. just one sugeation. 'Screaming it up at the blue sky' blue seems a bit out of place for a poem about how bad it is without her. maybe black or gray would go beter. other than that it was great. keep up the good work
Very nicely written..may i say dont put "Im tired of" in the last 3 lines of the first stanza.bThe fourth part really got me thinkin..did u make that up? or did she say that. very nice. Sweet!
great poem made me think what is important to me and what should be though it was like a giant run on since no punctuation at allbut i thought it was a great write...
yeah, up until the last line i thought this was some sort of love poem after breaking up with someone, but then it confused me. when you mentioned life at the end, i wasn't sure if you were trying to say that life was the one who left you and who you miss, or if this person breaking up with you was just another part of life. you may want to clarify that a little bit. other than that, i thought it was a very good poem. you kept a constant rhyme scheme throughout the poem without taking away from the overall concept, which is hard. i also liked how you put in different sections of repetition, such as the "i'm tired" stanza and the part "to get/to judge/to appreciate/to get". i know some people think this makes a poem sloppy or unorganized, but i think you did it very well. it was a good write. *adds to favorites* ~Heather~
Submission Name: In Love With Life
