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    dots Submission Name: Mother May Idots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 1169
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 756



    Description:
       just things that come to my head. I know- bad self esteem. Yes very angst as well. i understand. Its not supposed to be that serious


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    dotsMother May Idots
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    Mommy
    Will you tie my shoes?
    Or should I
    Go sit in my room
    Rotting away
    Staring at the white walls?
    At least I'll be out of your way.

    I'm sorry
    I'm not your princess
    Anymore
    Just let me be now
    I've got a counseling session
    In my room
    At ten
    With a box of Hot Tamales

    Here's my friend
    We look a lot alike
    Except for some reason I don't like
    How she looks
    Oops
    I was looking in the mirror

    So dilusional these days
    You must beleive
    Dear one
    My cup is half empty
    Not half full
    Mother may I
    Take another sip?




    Submitted on 2004-07-01 18:24:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it. It was very different and thats what makes it so cool. It was cool how you talked about you relationship, (or lack there of) with your mom and the ending was cool too. I liked how you put that as your title. Very original, and it's going as a favorite.
    Jan,
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was very original... I thought this was good and full of lots of thoughts... though most were a bit pessimistic and sad like "half empty not half full" which is always the way I look at a glass. It also seemed like it contained some innocence... very child like. I thought it was a good poem though. I liked it.
    Brooke
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to agree with elf you and your mom have some stuff to work out. think that this was an excelent write . great job keep it up lia
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      Self contemplative to boot. One more time round the navel. However, maybe it needs to be said sometimes. In which case you said it well. Just not my favourite topic.
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that this piece was amazing on more than one level, in its irony, originality, and many other things and it all just came together perfectly in my mind
    thank you for your comment on ''why man''
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by locke | [ Reply to This ]


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