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    dots Submission Name: Threaddots
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    Author: BeautifulSoul
    ASL Info:    17/F/In
    Elite Ratio:    7.71 - 52/22/16
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 100
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    Bytes: 456



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    My love for you is like a wilted rose,
    once it stood tall and proud,
    now it no longer grows,
    hidden from the sun by your dark shroud.
    That girl is dead.
    No longer me.
    No more tears will be shed,
    for the girl who will no longer be.
    A new girl stands tall and proud,
    she throws off your smothering shroud.
    In her life she holds the thread,
    for in her new life you are dead.




    Submitted on 2008-04-29 13:48:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice work! I associate thread with mending, and you hold the thread in this case! Excellent, very meaningful write, lovely lady!!
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Suggestion: Could you make...

    That girl is dead.
    She is no longer me

    That girl is dead,
    no longer me

    That was amazing. Wow, you have true talent. The words a pieced together in such a way that I can feel both her conquering and her broken spirit. I feel as though I am in her shoes. Thats beautiful.
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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