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    dots Submission Name: Stolen Heartdots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    ASL Info:    19/F/CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 44/54/47
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 466



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       I wrote it to express myself in my confusion.... if you read it comment it please


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    dotsStolen Heartdots
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    Thought it was over.
    Thought it ended.
    I made myself move on.
    I did it all for you.
    I'd do anything for you.
    I lied to you.
    I'm horrible.
    I'm dispicable.
    I'm scum.
    Nothing I do is right.
    I'm a mess up.
    Nothing can change the past.
    The only thing I have left are the memories.
    You stole my heart.
    I never took it back.
    You still have it.




    Submitted on 2008-04-29 15:05:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this was a wonderful piece, I could relate and feel the emotion in every line. Great job, and hope to see more!
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by Savannah Cullen | [ Reply to This ]
      This is more than a good write, this very good stuff. you are a poetis, Sorry you didn't go after your heart in this piece. but you know its still with you.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      God gives it to us to make mistakes, so we can learn from them!

    That Guy doesn't really have your heart; it is too big for any one person to carry away!

    Yours is a very emotional write that shows an artistic nature and a developing talent that will twinkle amongst the Stars for all of to gaze at oneday!
    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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