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Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184 /213 /288
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on Feb. 29, 2008. Inspired by "Consume Me" by dc Talk. I know it doesn't really rhyme, but I don't care. I could have went on and on...but I didn't want it to be umpteen pages long!


You're beautiful
You are the air
you're the wind in the trees
the cool in the rain

The warmth in the sun
the sparkle in the eye
You're in the light of the moon
the stars in the sky

You're everywhere
In the song of the bird
the delicacy of the flower
Beauty in the sky

You're the greatness of the trees
the majesty of the mountains
You paint the sky for me
and send refreshment every morning

The trickle of the stream
the roar of the waterfall
you surround me
with all your love

The spirit of the horse
the flight of the eagle
the strength of the lion
and the gentleness of the lamb.

You're everywhere, Lord
and you're so beautiful!

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  Beautiful Work, I love it. I would not change a thing about's perfect.
Love and Peace,
| Posted on 2008-04-30 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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