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    dots Submission Name: Not Just Teethdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNot Just Teethdots
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    Your touch is poison
    Your kisses leak venom
    Our love an illusion
    I was struck with confusion

    Your presence brings toxin
    Your embrace is a rash
    I'm glad we've quit talking
    And it's all in the past

    I need a vaccine
    I need to find a cure
    I need someone to heal me
    My heart is impure

    You can't just give it back
    It's not that easy
    These things are delicate
    My heart is still yours

    I reclaim small pieces
    Little at a time
    And I keep a tally
    Until it's all mine

    I'll overturn these walls
    Do it on the run
    I'll find it as I fall
    But with you I'm done

    I'll close my eyes
    And invision someone else
    I won't leave a trail
    I'm already in hell

    And as I walk away
    Every step with more ease
    Each and every day
    It's not so hard to breathe

    A viper's bite will hurt
    But it's venom can kill




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