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    dots Submission Name: luckydots
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    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 190/178/112
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Society
    Total Views: 63
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1849



    Description:
       a new song for fr. xo lilham


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    dotsluckydots
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    verse 1

    I squeaked by with the mercy of life.
    It's the truth, (I won't lie)
    but, it's something I'd like to deny.
    Sometimes we could barely rely on anything.
    So hurry, brace yourself!
    Consider yourself so lucky!


    Chorus:
    You're making me miss you
    Baby Yes
    You're making me miss you
    Darling Yes
    Cause you don't believe, that
    I believe in you.
    So you're making me miss you.
    Yes, it's true (drums)

    verse 2

    Yes so lucky
    Lucky like Steven
    Lost in the basement
    On a hill and wasted
    Cause' the sun is not red anymore
    And, there's no blood in the kitchen

    Chorus:
    You're making me miss you
    Baby Yes
    You're making me miss you
    Darling Yes
    Cause you don't believe, that
    I believe in you.
    So you're making me miss you.
    Yes, it's true (drums)

    Bridge:
    You the faithless
    I'm talking to you
    I might be bitter, cause you
    Left me standing here.
    Yes, you the faithless
    I'm talking to you,
    I think you fooled me most of the year before...

    verse 3

    Four leaf clovers
    Make me pout
    Flipping copper
    Makes me doubt,
    That you my love, would ever be true
    I'll leave it up to you.


    Chorus:
    You're making me miss you
    Baby Yes
    You're making me miss you
    Darling Yes
    Cause you don't believe, that
    I believe in you.
    So you're making me miss you.
    Yes, it's true (drums)




    Submitted on 2008-04-29 23:58:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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