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    dots Submission Name: Love me for the nightdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 819
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    Description:
       QWrote this from my sister's point of view..i was trying to understand why she does one night stands...i came to the c9onclusion..theres no other reason...she just wants to be loved. *shrugs* tell me what u guys think..mind u we are triplets so we can know what each other thinks anyway. :)



    what category should this go under??


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    dotsLove me for the nightdots
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    Take a dip in my caramel selection
    Sing the songs of innocent denial
    Sleep and dream of tasteful intuition
    Love me for the night

    Touch my soul as my emotions cry for freedom
    Whisper slowly that you will only disappear
    Reassure me when morning comes I'll be alright
    Just love me for the night




    Submitted on 2004-07-01 18:40:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW! It is such a romantic vision of one night stands. In my mind there will be a taste of bitterness right after. But what i can sense underlying in the poem is a deep sentiment of melancholy, especially in teh 2nd stanza maybe we also sense a fear of commitment.
    Unlike the 1st stanza, where we only feel the sensuality and passion.
    I read over and over, good work...
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm.. I think it would be good under "love" or "passion" perhaps... Anyways I thought this was a good piece.. short but to the point. I liked how you used the "Just love me for the night" at the end of both stanzas. It made that line stand out more powerfully then the rest. Nice piece. Very emotional.
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very complicated piece, very short and to the point, and is loaded with double meanings. At the same time erotic and neurotic, lol.

    I understand the feeling behind it though. The need to feel, but not to feel attached which brings in so many confusions and fears.
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]


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