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    dots Submission Name: You'll never be alonedots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 269/227/132
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYou'll never be alonedots
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    I was waiting
    For the day you came around.
    But I didn’t know what I was searching for,
    So nothing was all I found.

    You’ll never be alone.
    When darkness comes,
    Ill never abandon you.
    Ill light the night with stars,
    And our love will get us through.

    You’ll never be alone.
    When the sun chases away the twilight,
    Ill never abandon you.
    Ill burn with you,
    Cause our love is a burning, consuming fire.

    I’m just waiting my love,
    To turn your tears to kisses
    And don’t you have a doubt
    I’m here for you always,
    Ill be here to hear you out,
    And make it better.

    Somehow I'll show you that you are my night sky
    I've always been right behind you, your shadow.
    But now its you ill be by,
    Side by side.
    Now that we're together, I hope we never part.
    One soul and one heart.




    Submitted on 2008-04-30 04:46:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well done i sooo yearn for exactly the emotions that you have expressed here i am also a hopeless romantic as you will see if you read any of my material wow i loved every line of this piece well done you are an amazing writer thanks for sharing

    XX Timmy S. Edgar
    | Posted on 2008-11-01 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the closing lines in this heart-warming poem:
    "Now that we're together, I hope we never part.
    One soul and one heart."

    No one want to be alone. There's lot of heart in your words.

    Line 3---"no" should be "know"
    Line 25---"were" should be "we're"

    Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-04-30 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a very good poem, it have a plenty of emotions though it lacks the figures of speech. The first stanza is the best one it reveals the un-pointed mind in a very good way, in the second stanza in “Ill light the night with stars” you godify yourself in a great way, in “And our love will get us through” you made a good simile for love as a guardian angel, you refrain “You'll never be alone” is really nice, Your simile in “Somehow I'll show you that you are my night sky” is not so good because it make the meaning weaker . Any way it is a fine poem
    | Posted on 2008-04-30 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]


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