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    dots Submission Name: Entrapmentdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Yesterday I was a boy
    Tomorrow I'll be a man
    Today has no label
    I have no real plan

    I need to see the big picture
    I need to focus on the nigh
    I'd like to have a companion
    To help with my burdens or try

    The road ahead is long
    Tomorrow may never come
    It's hard to reach the end
    At least it is to some

    My heart has no place here
    I should leave it back
    I can't even see clear
    It blots out your tracks

    How can you follow
    What you cannot see
    You may not be real
    There is no guarantee

    I need to plot
    I need a ploy
    I am distraught
    This brings no joy

    I cannot cry
    I am not a child
    But I can't even stand
    For I am not a man

    It all boils down to time
    If you use it wisely
    Failure is a crime
    One I don't wish to see

    I struggle to sleep
    I struggle while I sleep
    I pray to awake
    And I'm dismayed when I do




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