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    dots Submission Name: Till It's Gonedots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 252/240/192
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 68
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 929



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    dotsTill It's Gonedots
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    Memories
    of the one I loved,
    the one I lost.
    I wonder if you can
    remember me at all.
    I remember you clearly.
    I rememberthe way
    you looked when you drew.
    When you looked at me
    from across the room
    even before I called you mine.
    It's been months
    since I seen you,
    and I can still remember you
    as if it was only yesterday.
    The dimples when you smiled.
    How your face got serious
    when you held me in your arms.
    So many times,
    I wondered what happened to us.
    We don't talk anymore.
    My e-mails go unanswered,
    phone calls are ignored.
    And when I think of you,
    I wish I could go back,
    do it all over again.
    But it's too late,
    you're gone,
    out of my life.
    And now I wonder,
    will you ever come back?




    Submitted on 2008-04-30 11:45:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It was ok. It had feeling in there which will completely ruin a poem if it lacks and you were good at adding yours in there. You did nice with the details and description of the person and their ways. It was a nice poem. I wouldn't say it was one of the best I've every read, but it was better than a lot.

    Great Job.
    | Posted on 2008-04-30 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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