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    dots Submission Name: Let's play a game...dots
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    Author: Natsumi Tsuke
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 603
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 669



    Description:
       Watching someone else write theres...Yeah, I feel like I'm copying someone else....Wah! Okay, I'm done feeling guilty! Heheh, though this poem does make me feel...oddly peaceful.


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    dotsLet's play a game...dots
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    Let's play a game
    A game not many tend to play
    One of perverse
    One of seduction
    One of a rose to an innocent child

    Let's play a game
    See where it ends
    Find a way to roam the ends
    And turn it upside down

    Let's play a game
    A game of dwindling innocence
    A game that will pull you to pieces
    If you fall into the trap
    That contains your beating heart

    Let's play a game
    That will tear you apart
    A seduction towards
    Mine sadistic soul

    Let's play a game
    That let's me watch you die.




    Submitted on 2008-04-30 15:11:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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