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    dots Submission Name: WMD's.dots
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    Author: insipid sky
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 142/145/28
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this at work.


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    dotsWMD's.dots
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    Wipe your red-rimmed eyes,
    this comes as no surprise -
    We are all rising to demise.

    Weapons of mass deception,
    needles spreading infection,
    deaths occurring in rapid succession.

    No cure in sight,
    no time for respite -
    Who will win this gruesome fight?

    The government very well may
    by keeping our fears at bay
    as they hide the blood spray.

    Evil quite possibly will prevail,
    with moral bankruptcy weighing down the scale -
    Hammer another coffin's nail.

    Beyond this though,
    is a chance to grow,
    To make a friend of a foe.

    Furthermore is the option of peace,
    for love to flourish and hatred to cease,
    To capture light and experience release.

    It can only happen with the right choice,
    We must decide to use our voice,
    Stand for what is right, and only in truth REJOICE.

    It is a struggle, and it can be hard to believe,
    but walk in faith - grasp and cleave,
    And you'll receive more than you can conceive.




    Submitted on 2008-04-30 23:45:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my mind went all over the place when i read this piece. i dont usually have anything to do with the media because it always makes me so angry but today in my lunch break i opened the world focus section of the paper to find a piece about ethiopia. because i left my heart in ethiopia i read the article but somehow started reading through some of the other ones in this section too...

    one of them i read was about africom. i dont know much about it at all but i did read a lot about the response of africans who had no idea what it was all about and feared that america was bringing their army to invade or something. a statement in this article by some US official said something about the US military being able to show africans the way their armies could function...

    ugh. i dunno. i have always been fascinated with the completely different way africa exists and i dont know why the western world is so quick to believe they have the answers for the issues africa finds itself with...


    yup. and i got to that point from this piece because the wars focussing on weapons of mass destruction didnt really solve anything since there were never any such things found and so im kinda wondering whether the idea of showing a continent the way armies should run would really work anyways...?



    your use of rhyme is interesting. the first coupla stanzas were glaringly obvious but then it sorta settled down some and worked its way through the piece well

    im kinda torn over your capitalisation of rejoice. because,while i can see the point, it kinda distracts somehow...

    im wondering whether Truth ought to be capitalised? im wondering whether you are speaking of a specific Truth...?
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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