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    dots Submission Name: Evil Gooddots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsEvil Gooddots

    It was tragic
    When my evil did slip away
    Believe in magic
    Because good will return someday

    It wasn't even obvious
    I couldn't see it
    My eyes couldn't focus
    Naive I'll admit

    It's not like the stories
    Because evil feels good
    It doesn't stand out
    You'd think it would

    You'll ache when you lose it
    But reveal all it's lies
    Unveil all the secrets
    See with unclouded eyes

    Because the good feeling you get
    It isn't at all truth
    It hurts but don't fret
    The pain will end soon

    That's when the time comes
    You'll stand on your own
    Go find your good thing
    Don't end up alone

    Check it for lies
    Check it for teeth
    Leave those that bite
    Reveal what is deep

    Being alone hurts but is only second to living a lie

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      Good poem. I like it.
    `That's when the time comes
    You'll stand on your own
    Go find your good thing
    Don't end up alone`
    This I find inspiring with a serious warning.
    Your poem I presume attest to the fact that evil cannot stand against good and will eventually lose the ground it stands on. Because the very ground evil created from itself is an illusion. Good can never harm anyone if understood correctly. I am well familiar with magic as I know how itís done. No one can use the frequencies of the universe (powers some call it) for any other purpose it was created for. Either used for evil intentions to do harm or with intentions to do well. Not referring to Satanism itís something else. The choice lives with us.
    `Being alone hurts but is only second to living a lie`. Well done. Regards. Joachim
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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