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    dots Submission Name: Pleasing & Easingdots
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    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 796
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    Description:
       Reflection to Booby K's "The Other Lost Half Of Yourself "


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    dotsPleasing & Easingdots
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    Pleasing self, easing myself,
    kindling rhythm, fumbling mayhem,

    I am musing and fusing and refusing,
    I sleep all day and work all night,
    refuse to sleep, weep and walk,

    when I am growing fat,
    my pants hung up on the wall
    as if someday I will be slim again and I can wear them out...

    I get bored,
    I get shit scared,
    Afraid I might say something,
    I am passionate about living,

    But more often I am loathing,
    Looking for work, but with a compulsion,
    Pleasing & easing,
    Making my life.... the story of my life




    Submitted on 2008-05-01 13:42:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it , I think it has a nice ring to it.
    This is a good write. and I am flatered that
    you were inspired to write a poem.

    No, Mother nature did her thing on the other
    side of the James River. I, myself was doing my laundry watching the News as it happened.
    I wanted to be some where else, with someone else, doing something else. as wishful thinking go's. but thanks for asking.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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