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Pleasing & Easing


Author: rawpot
ASL Info:    24/M/India
Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383 /256 /84
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
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Reflection to Booby K's "The Other Lost Half Of Yourself "


Pleasing & Easing



Pleasing self, easing myself,
kindling rhythm, fumbling mayhem,

I am musing and fusing and refusing,
I sleep all day and work all night,
refuse to sleep, weep and walk,

when I am growing fat,
my pants hung up on the wall
as if someday I will be slim again and I can wear them out...

I get bored,
I get shit scared,
Afraid I might say something,
I am passionate about living,

But more often I am loathing,
Looking for work, but with a compulsion,
Pleasing & easing,
Making my life.... the story of my life




Submitted on 2008-05-01 13:42:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it , I think it has a nice ring to it.
This is a good write. and I am flatered that
you were inspired to write a poem.

No, Mother nature did her thing on the other
side of the James River. I, myself was doing my laundry watching the News as it happened.
I wanted to be some where else, with someone else, doing something else. as wishful thinking go's. but thanks for asking.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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