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    dots Submission Name: Right on Cuedots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 776



    Description:
       ode to a former boyfriend.


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    dotsRight on Cuedots
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    I knew this was coming.
    I promise it's nothing new.
    I've been through this before...
    you broke my heart right on cue.

    But come on, hurt my feelings.
    Please break my heart again.
    Make me cry myself to sleep;
    'cause I know what happens then...

    nothing at all but profit
    is headed my way.
    I may be miserable now,
    but tomorrow's another day.

    And soon enough these tears
    will pour out of my pen
    onto paper that will make me famous,
    and only you'll be crying when

    I reap all the benefits
    while you're left with pure regret.
    With just a poem as a memory,
    you I'll soon forget!




    Submitted on 2008-05-01 17:29:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey this was great
    probably one of the BEST send off poems I have ever read

    the word choice was great

    Congrats

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-05-02 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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