Description: This is more of a rant, but it is in poem format so...it's a poem!!!^_^ so, yea this was last night. I started writing it then, but i couldn't concentrate so i decided to finish it...well now i geuss
You Demand, I Let Down -------------------------------------------
You say I don't think of others
you say I don't try
You demand to know everything
You demand to know why.
What about me?
Do you think I know these answers
Do you think I understand
Well I don't, and I've said that a million times
You yell at me for not telling you why.
Give me a fucking chance to tell you.
I'm sorry if i'm crying and you are too
Impatient to wait for me to gather my voice.
My life doesn't suck, but I feel like crap anyways.
All I want is too live with my aunts.
I'll continue the therapy, I'll take the fucking meds
Just let me move in with my Aunts.
That's all I ask of you, just give me that.
I beg you.
If you want to see me happy,
Let me go...
Do you think I understand
Well I don't, and I've said that a million times
Do you think I understand?
I dont, as I've said a million times.
Might be better?
And, the I hate not knowing stanza is just too much. I don't know why, but it just...needs editing.
Suggestion: Do you think making..
You yell at me for not telling you why.
Give me a [censored] chance to tell you.
I'm sorry if i'm crying and you are too
Impatient to wait for me to gather my voice.
You yell at me!
give me a chance,
I'm sorry if by crying so do you,
but impatience is going nowhere--let me gather my voice.
Or something along those lines...
I know it sounds like I am trashing your piece, but I really think that some of it is rather good!
Submission Name: You Demand, I Let Down
