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    dots Submission Name: Lust Foedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLust Foedots
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    The edges are sharp
    The risks are high
    The goal is far
    The end is nigh

    There is much to ask
    Rarely much to gain
    Seldom does it last
    It devours the sane

    It borders death
    And much bloodshed
    It leaves the rest
    All stained in red

    It knows no innocence
    It ignores such feats
    It grows inside you
    And bears it's teeth

    It naws on bone
    Then chews it dust
    It leaves you cold
    Destroys your trust

    It sinks it's fangs
    As it tilts you back
    Deep in your veins
    Your soul will crack

    When it's done
    It reveals a lustful grin
    The bad dream is over
    Now the nightmare can begin

    You will beg and plea
    But it ignores your shouts
    Left in agony
    In your mind you'll doubt

    It's hard to believe
    The pain you will feel
    To such a degree
    It will give you chills

    Dementia is a blessing
    Insanity may ignore
    No consciousness left to
    Comprehend all of this gore

    But if you lose your mind
    You'll never recognize
    This thing hurting you
    Peers through familiar eyes

    You may have known all along
    What once held your heart
    Would take your world
    And rip it apart

    But there will be no truce
    Mercy is for those who care
    When the violence is through
    Try and run if you dare

    If you ever escape
    You may be free again
    But the risk you will take
    Will soon be a trend

    For demons will pass
    They come and they go
    You just have to hope
    It's worth the trouble

    Keep your eyes peeled
    Keep yourself pure
    The heart is frail
    But it can endure




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