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    dots Submission Name: Humandots
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    Author: DeadlyDodo
    Elite Ratio:    7.99 - 11/12/8
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this to my uncle cause I felt judged by him, like he didn't realise I was human too.


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    dotsHumandots
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    Both of us are human
    and both of us are real
    We have the same senses,
    we can touch and we can feel

    We each have emotions
    and feelings deep inside
    We each have different features
    like our fear and our pride

    And we both, being human,
    sometimes find that we hide
    what it is we're really feeling
    deep down, deep inside

    Though many do not see it
    we can all put up a front
    hiding our true selves
    like it's a puny little runt

    We try to represent ourselves
    as best as we can
    Fighting for every inch
    to be a respectable man

    We just want to be accepted,
    loved and cared for
    by everyone around us,
    by our family even more

    But people judge to quickly,
    just by what they see
    and never come to understand
    the real you and me

    They don't see the times
    when you're lonely and depressed
    They only get to see you
    when you're boasting, fully dressed

    Trying to persuade them
    That you're good enough to meet
    good enough to care for
    maybe good enough to eat

    So don't judge me by my cover,
    I'm human just like you
    Although in ways we differ
    I think you'll find its true

    That both of us are human
    and both of us are real
    We each have the same senses
    We can both touch.
    We can both feel.




    Submitted on 2008-05-02 20:21:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Now that you're a poet born,
    you'll find that some poets are and can be very critical of any other work and sometimes their own. There are books and other help aids if you want people read and understand your poetry.
    Writing can be therapeutic, writing will be there for you when no one us is. I have a piece called
    (As A Poet) That I post again. I it will help you in some ways and its fun to read.

    The Poor Man's Poet
    P.S. I like your pen name.
    | Posted on 2008-05-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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