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    dots Submission Name: Second Rate Siblingdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       To Sister


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    dotsSecond Rate Siblingdots
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    Weaving the nets to catch
    Your every tear
    I've been protecting you
    For years and years.

    How Strange to live
    In your tiny shadow
    Petit and Perfect
    So much better, I Know.

    I live to please.
    I love to please.
    I hate to be
    Second rate.

    But still I flatter myself
    Into thinking you need me
    I wish you needed my help
    More than I need you to need me





    Submitted on 2008-05-02 20:44:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My beautiful brilliant Angel,

    you are not and never could be second rate.
    you and Squeakie are different, but both of you are perfect in every way.

    Baby sister does need you, you have helped her to become stronger and have offered guidance and support to her all her life. (except for when you teased her when she was tiny because you thought she sounded 'funny' when she cried...)

    she looks up to you and learns so much from you. i love the fact that you two are so close and best friends. you are so lucky to have eachother.

    you and your sister may seem to you to be different, but together you are a formidable force of nature.

    my Spawn!

    i love you
    with all my heart,

    Mummie
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      baby I love you
    and I get what you mean by second rate by your sister but baby your not second rate to me i love you
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
      baby I love you
    and I get what you mean by second rate by your sister but baby your not second rate to me i love you
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
      baby I love you
    and I get what you mean by second rate by your sister but baby your not second rate to me i love you
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
      have you ever tried NOT being there for her when you think she needs you a few times in a row? that oughta change how she acts toward you a little bit. :D
    | Posted on 2008-05-03 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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