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    dots Submission Name: Hindered Hushdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 432
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    dotsHindered Hushdots
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    I can't drink it away
    I can't sleep it off
    I can't forget it today
    I can't fill this loft

    Everywhere I turn
    I don't have to try
    My memory continues taunting
    You're my angry sty

    My heart cries in misery
    You seemed so happy
    Now that you're without me
    Are you better free

    Was I really that hard to live with
    That you had to leave
    Do you sneer at the thought of me
    Or is it hard to breathe

    Things will never go back
    I wouldn't change them anyway
    But you're stuck on my mind
    Curiosity wants to play

    It plays rough
    So I shut it up
    It's muffled pleas
    Are reduced to these

    Please don't respond
    I don't want a clue
    Wouldn't change a thing
    But turn my heart blue

    I don't want you back
    I'm not here for that
    I just want the pain
    To tire out again

    I'll always love you
    But that part is restrained
    That part of my heart
    Is battered, beaten, maimed

    I've cut out it's tongue
    So I'll never say it again
    I'm hoping it will fade
    As if it had never been




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