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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    She's so scared of moving forward
    But ready to leave this place behind.
    She spends so much time in the past,
    Her future's no longer another lifetime.
    She's ready to be moved, to be raw.
    She's waiting to be enchanted by love again.
    But she's just not the same girl you saw.
    She's stuck, she'll cry for old time's sake,
    Yet staying back would be a mistake.
    Future ahead, with all her bitterweet memories,
    Her story is hidden in the baggage she brings.
    She's grown now and is learning to let go.
    College bound romantic, heading into a world she barely knows.




    Submitted on 2008-05-04 18:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      beautiful write. this is a great description of what many girls go through during changing times. several people can relate to this.
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    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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