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    dots Submission Name: Shadows' Falldots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 36/42/45
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsShadows' Falldots
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    Who is realer, him or me?
    I desire to know, does he humor me?
    As we hit the road, he teases me
    Imitation is his specialty
    He mimics my posture, standing straight
    Then walks beside me, hands on his waist
    But I intend to stop this pitiful race
    I increase my pace, we are face to face
    On the pavement, then he clings to the wall
    So cold these streets are in the fall
    He seems edgy, beside himself
    Twisting and turning, hides in stealth
    As I stop to take a break,
    I place my hand upon his face,
    Rough and jagged, his ending is near
    Little does he know, but still no fear
    I purchase a drink, he steals a beverage
    Playing mind games, I yield no leverage
    We reach the bridge, a tear a bit
    His blank stare, hardly a forfeit
    I place one leg over the edge
    I don’t care what he says!
    Leap of faith, let’s end this fight
    Him and me, the river, we unite.




    Submitted on 2008-05-04 21:36:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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