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A Scene by the Lake


Author: 7makaveli
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A Scene by the Lake



A scene by the lake,
Serene landscape
Trees by the lake,
Fresh air they make
Warmth of the lake,
Joyful intake

Half land, half water
Just the sun and a daughter
Birds in song and laughter
Branches shade and mask her
Flowers of spring stand tall
Pleasant showers of rain fall

While the day is bright lights
Blackness comes with the night
Starry sights, but insects start to creep
So mother moon puts her to sleep
Comfortably asleep by the lake,
Flourishing in the dreamy landscape




Submitted on 2008-05-04 21:40:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the outdoors and nature and connect to "IT" daily so I really appreciated this piece. Thanks for sharing a positive beautiful piece.
love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
tif ~*~
| Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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