A Scene by the Lake

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A Scene by the Lake

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A scene by the lake, Serene landscape Trees by the lake, Fresh air they make Warmth of the lake, Joyful intake Half land, half water Just the sun and a daughter Birds in song and laughter Branches shade and mask her Flowers of spring stand tall Pleasant showers of rain fall While the day is bright lights Blackness comes with the night Starry sights, but insects start to creep So mother moon puts her to sleep Comfortably asleep by the lake, Flourishing in the dreamy landscape

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I love the outdoors and nature and connect to "IT" daily so I really appreciated this piece. Thanks for sharing a positive beautiful piece. love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share tif ~*~

| Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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