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    dots Submission Name: with youdots

    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotswith youdots

    this is not like home
    nothing like I've seen before.
    Not where I wanna be
    this is all I know for sure.

    every thing is beautiful
    like a poisonous flower.
    so much so it's decieving
    and this has left me sour.

    this is not what I expected
    it isn't what I wanted before.
    I wish to see where you are
    and to be knocking at the door.

    I wish that I could hold you
    this beauty don't compare,
    to that I've seen in you.
    it just seems so unfair.

    forgive me. I can't be there:
    but I hope to be there soon.
    just know till then if you look up
    we will share the same moon.

    I feel so empty now
    knowing once your touch.
    I've never known a time in life
    I've felt I've missed this much.

    this feeling, it is horrible.
    I feel I'll come undone.
    even in things I once enjoyed
    I can not find fun.

    keep me in you thoughts
    remember what we share.
    To the things I feel with you,
    all others can't compare.

    I hope we make it through this year:
    just know that I'll be true.
    Because in this world the only place
    I want to be's with you.

    Submitted on 2008-05-05 05:05:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I really liked it. It flowed fairly well, the rhyme was consistant. Other than afew grammericals, it was perfect!!! I can't say I relate because my special someone is pouting in my room, I would hate to not have him around. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll reading

    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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